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could someone critique this for me...?
« on: October 24, 2009, 04:53:15 AM »
yea... if anyone could give me some critique on how to make the one profile face better please, please say it.... >_> ... like i know the mouth is off for one thing but like aghhh it doesn't look right!!!!... yea.... sorry >>

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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #1 on: October 24, 2009, 07:30:53 AM »
think in archs, after i did, my work got alot better

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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #2 on: October 24, 2009, 09:49:00 AM »
the lips on the far right one are alittle too kissy. Other than that, bon travaille!
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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #3 on: October 24, 2009, 06:18:36 PM »
Looks really good, theres a lot of potential for the picture. have you decided on colors yet? I have a pic that you might want to take a look at for ideas =D

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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #4 on: October 24, 2009, 06:28:14 PM »
euh the current plan was like... a yellowish skin tone for the faces then the body is mainly green since she's like... a planty person... but like yea... please feel free to suggest anyhing... theres still a number of things i gotta decide on >>

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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #5 on: October 25, 2009, 03:51:58 AM »
Your problem is the curve in the face near the eye socket, the kissy face only needs slight altercation, but the curve you made is too gradual and the eye socket is too low. You need to deepen the curve, and move it up just the slightest bit.

You usually color things great, so I won't give you any coloring tips, I'm sure you will do better than anything I can suggest.

The contrast in the faces is AMAZING! Like, really good! Keep it up, and STOP DEGRADING YOUR OWN WORK! It's really really good and you need to stop being so hard no yourself.
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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #6 on: October 25, 2009, 10:59:10 AM »
I think the kissy face could work if the lips end up twisted

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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #7 on: October 25, 2009, 07:35:54 PM »
Maybe... She could work with it a little
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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #8 on: October 26, 2009, 08:21:47 PM »
i ended up redoing both faces ((i killed the middle one while inking....))... it looks like this now:


sadly, im not fixing any of then though because i only got this week left to finish this project ....yay for giving up!! >_>


that middle face sucks... i know... i've learned my lesson about listening to that friend's art advice..... =_= ... hopefully no one will notice when it's coloured.... >_<... i also decided to pose her sideways... yea... >_> my scanner is retarded....

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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #9 on: October 26, 2009, 09:00:47 PM »
I like the frowning  [lick]

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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #10 on: October 26, 2009, 10:10:54 PM »
Then one is really good too! The faces actually look better I think, more expressive! =D Great job! The left one seems calm, relieved, while the one facing the viewer seems sad, concerned... =] I like it!
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Re: could someone critique this for me...?
« Reply #12 on: October 27, 2009, 12:04:51 AM »
same here, thats why I like it! [cowb]

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