Discussion Zone: => Show Your Stuff! => Topic started by: Adelaide on November 03, 2009, 10:35:49 PM
Title: Addy's Poems
Post by: Adelaide on November 03, 2009, 10:35:49 PM
o.o Omega has been posting a lot of poetry so here's some of mine I guess..
Uhm.. this one was a request from a friend of mine who liked wolves o.o This has an ABAB CDCD EFEF GHGH IJIJ sorta rhyme scheme.. (for those who dont use letters to explain rhyme scheme "ABAB" is a single stanza, every line labeled "A" rhymes with every other line labeled "A")
Wolves' Pursuit
Glimmering moon Full in the sky Silver cast strewn In rippled water of wry
Through forest trees Runs a frantic deer Icy cold breeze Eyes widened in fear
Stalking close behind The pack nears its prey A deer's racing mind They wish to slay
Bloodied claws tear Pure white fangs snap Long ruffled grey hair Leave the deer a mere scrap
A ominous low howl Sounds through the woods Entwined in coos from an owl Beauty is misunderstood
Basic theme: Beauty is in the eye of the beholder.
Uh... this one works more around the use of symbolism... I was fond of it..
Roses are Red
As gorgeous as it seems to be It trusts no one but itself It stands alone, a single rose Surrounded by its defensive thorns
It withers ever so slow Its prominent petals of red Drop around its roots I can see it die
The dreadful life it had Is nearing to an end And it seems that its fates been sealed to always be alone even when its dead
Out of souls and out of minds It suffers alone From its fear to trust Live alone then die alone it must
If it hadn't known the world For what it truly was It might just have been naive enough To trust who's minds think of greed and lust
But it knew the truth That it would have soon been killed A death it shouldn't have to face But now must face alone
Will it be remembered, Once it is no more? Or will it be forgotten because It never learned to trust?
I originally posted that one of Red's forum while it was still pretty alive, so you can tell it's old..
Hey Diddle Diddle
Here I am with my riddle A rhyme about a cat and his fiddle over the moon, hey diddle diddle Between night and day the cow's stuck in the middle There a dog sits in joyful bliss Such a sight did not go amiss And laugh as he does at a sight such as this The laughter is swallowed into the abyss Here is where away a dish goes Why he does, only the spoon knows gone into the night, wind blows Strong they did seem, it was only a pose
o.o That one probably could have been continued but it died due to writer's block.. uhmm.. yeah... i didnt like it.. i feel the rhyme scheme was all over the place...
This next one was a result of an anxiety disorder I have.. uhmm... i had a lapse when i wrote it so.. o.o its just a venting of anxiety...
Stress
Here I am with pent up stress Heart beats fast, cardiac arrest Anxiety rules and I can't protest My endless thoughts never give it a rest
So much anxiety, so much tension I feel like I'm lost in another's dimension Finding it hard to pay any attention I feel as if I owe them all some bit of pension
I won't ever voice my own inner pains My fears have me tangled up in their chains Sorrow is now surging through all of my veins From my eyes down my face sorrow rains
Your problems will always come before my own My own mental law that is written in stone And when the days over and I am alone Now you can smile, but to stress I'm still prone
I want to help the world see the light And I wish for hope to be within their sight So that to them the future is bright Though I'll be left behind in the darkness of night
So here I am, a slave to pure intentions And stress, it shall be my own abstention Because your problems will always be my interventions And more forceful will be my tensions
The pain will build and I will deny that I too have problems, though its only a lie And soon I shall be put into my own natural high And waving to you goodbye as I die...
It was mostly about how i kept trying to help everyone else before i took myself into account and how the stress eventually built up.. luckily my GAD (Generalized Anxiety Disorder) hasn't been a problem for a few years now.. I haven't had a lapse in a long long time.. i think I finally got past it =D YAY
This I think is my most recent poem I think...
Untitled
Sing to me a gentle song The voice of angels sings along
A gentle sound beckons to me I follow it now, what can it be?
It guides me away and I follow it still Into the darkness so I'll get my fill
The lighting is gone and I'm in pitch black The angels call; I cannot turn back
I can't keep from stepping further away I can't seem to remember why I wanted to stay
I glanced over my shoulder My heart just grows colder
As I gaze upon your face Why is it you I wish to embrace?
Of all thing things that I do want Your presence here, my heart it taunts
But the voice is still calling And I am still falling
So please catch me in you arms And hold me there for just a while And comfort with your loving smile And for just a moment I'll be whole
Even so.. it too is old o.o I should probably get working on a few new ones but I've been distracted.. blah...
Just a few old works I guess.. o.o
Well.. bai!
Title: Re: Addy's Poems
Post by: Flashwerewolf on November 03, 2009, 10:43:16 PM
Nice! They are pretty good!
Title: Re: Addy's Poems
Post by: Adelaide on November 03, 2009, 11:18:58 PM
THANKS!
Title: Re: Addy's Poems
Post by: Shashuneko on November 04, 2009, 02:45:43 PM
I likes! Good stuff! [neko02] I'm really feeling the first one, 'wolve's pursuit'!
(Yay, first post in forevers!)
Title: Re: Addy's Poems
Post by: Omega on November 04, 2009, 03:25:45 PM
*rages from the awesome-ness of these poems* I LOVE THESE! [sword]
Title: Re: Addy's Poems
Post by: Adelaide on November 05, 2009, 12:14:44 AM